Query of the Day

Fun fact: this one has a typo in the title (which I'm not giving here).


"Dear Reader,

I have a complete screenplay that has been edited, with a critique and is "Pitch Ready". The best way to put together a query letter is to put in the Logline and Synopsis below. I can provide the critique upon request. The first paragraph is the Logline and the second the Synopsis.

My screenplay is an Action/Drama that is set against the Global Industrial Food Complex. It is a full length screenplay.

Tim's savior complex constantly pushes him into battles for the underdog. Saving an Iraqi girl from being shot pushes him into a global conspiracy to control the World's Industrial food supply. The choice is "Patented Corporate Seeds" vs. bequeathing "Nature's Seeds", to our children! A battle Tim didn't want!

Tim grows up with a Savior complex in a dysfunctional family in Golden, Oklahoma. The night Broken Bow High wins the Oklahoma State Football Championship, Tim's brother, Jason, dies from a long bout with cancer. He and Otis (his best friend) join the Navy Seals where they can make a difference. They are first into Afghanistan and Iraq. An executive, Warren, for Mansenti Corporation is overseeing the confiscation of the Iraqi national seed bank; Order 81, of the constitutional orders.

Warren's shoots three people in cold blood, and nearly a fourth before Tim can stop him. Maiming Warren ignites a personal vendetta for Tim. Tim is kicked out of the military becoming a drifter. Warren, uses his power to manipulate circumstances to get back at Tim but he becomes the victim of his own plan.

Warren, trying to seduce Tim's cousin Annette (a chemist for Mansenti), is rebuffed because of her affair with Warren's assistant Kathleen. Kathleen reveals to Annette, she works for a group trying to bring down Mansenti.

Mansenti controls the Global Industrial Food Complex that is behind the war in Iraq, their mantra? "Control what people eat and control the people!"

I look forward to hearing from you."